Poetry Rivals Entry: The Shadow
Well basically I have this poetry writing competition and I was wondering if I could have some feedback on it so please comment!
The Shadow
I awake one night,
But I can’t see a thing,
Then all of a sudden,
The doorbell rings.
I creep down the stairs,
I look at the time,
It’s midnight,
The perfect hour for a crime.
I don’t mean crime,
Of burglars and thieves,
I hear a rustle,
In the trees.
I mean the crimes,
Of the shadow at night,
It walks down streets,
Stealing light.
Light means hope,
Love and happiness,
The Shadow means despair,
Hatred and anxiousness.
Trembling fingers,
I open the door,
Not knowing what,
Will stand before.
Blood on his fingers,
A bruise on his knees,
“Can I have,
A plaster please?”
So please tell me what you think! It's for the Poetry Rivals Competition 2012 in case you're wondering. Thank you!
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DanielleNicole15
Commented 47 months ago - 19th June 2012 - 11:29am
This is a really good poem, I enjoyed reading it! :)
CeefaxOfLife
Commented 47 months ago - 19th June 2012 - 11:35am